Even in fic with propers, this is something I struggle against. I know it's probably me being more critical on myself than people are probably noticing, but when I have to go back and deliberately alter the sentence so as not to do that, I feel like it's glaringly obvious and therefore wooden.
I hear you on that. It's all about sentence structure variation or it becomes something like water torture. Drip, drip, drip.
Hee. :) I can understand your ire, but at the same time...I kind of appreciate the fact that they did make an effort to pay lip service to the elvish racism. I think we, the 21st century players, tend to ignore it, but multi-racial relationships in Thedas would probably be looked at askance by anyone outside the immediate circle of friends.
I know what you're saying and the rational, intellectual part of me appreciates this detail of the game. The part of me that is a fangirl and stoopid in love with a character... that's another story.
Seriously, though, I can see her having a knock-down fight with her only remaining child about having mixed children.
I try to be nice to newbies, but...
I know. I never, ever want to discourage someone from writing... but, it's so hard to explain that the level of brilliance to pull off a quality rehash is beyond most mortals.
I linked to my favorites, maybe that will help the potential!author see what we're saying? How it's been done already?
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Date: 2011-09-01 06:32 pm (UTC)I hear you on that. It's all about sentence structure variation or it becomes something like water torture. Drip, drip, drip.
Hee. :) I can understand your ire, but at the same time...I kind of appreciate the fact that they did make an effort to pay lip service to the elvish racism. I think we, the 21st century players, tend to ignore it, but multi-racial relationships in Thedas would probably be looked at askance by anyone outside the immediate circle of friends.
I know what you're saying and the rational, intellectual part of me appreciates this detail of the game. The part of me that is a fangirl and stoopid in love with a character... that's another story.
Seriously, though, I can see her having a knock-down fight with her only remaining child about having mixed children.
I try to be nice to newbies, but...
I know. I never, ever want to discourage someone from writing... but, it's so hard to explain that the level of brilliance to pull off a quality rehash is beyond most mortals.
I linked to my favorites, maybe that will help the potential!author see what we're saying? How it's been done already?