Editing, Reading, Cleaning, and Hay

[orchidcactus]

So, I'm working on editing Sleep Without Dreams. *points down*


Even if I cut, hack, and brutalize it, I'm not sure if it's too sweet to live anywhere other than this journal. (Given the small readership on this journal, it's something I can get away with for now... happy to share my kinks and sap with you folks.)

I've cut/changed most of the twee(*) dialogue, cut out extraneous magic... and am a bit happier.

There are some other issues, of course.

I love both reading and writing fic that relies on pronouns and clips out all propers.  It's slick, when done right. It makes it... sort of impersonal and cold... but contrasted against sex, it pushes my buttons. (Yeah, gonna toot my own horn. Understandings is pretty slick...)

The problem with it is the story ends up with a whole bunch of paragraphs starting with he/she/his/her. It's repetitive and annoying. So, I know I have some more work to do there to break it up a bit more.


Totally going to keep Leandra being a bitch. If you romance Fenris (and I assume Merril) Leandra says (paraphrase), "I've seen the way you and that elf look at each other."

That elf?

If you romance Anders, there's a similar line, but she names Anders, by, you know, his fucking name.

Hm.

Yes, Leandra, you get my hate in fanfiction.

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Reading. A post on dragon_age put me in the mood to find a few DA:O fics I read when I first became interested in the fandom. So, will be doing that soon.

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Hubby will be home tomorrow (yay!) so, cleaning and stuff to be done. If this blog goes dark, that's why.

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Hay. Finally got a load of hay delivered. My hay guy is nice. A little odd, but nice.

I unloaded the gooseneck without stabbing it with the hay fork and without tipping the tractor on its side. I think that deserves cookies.




(*) oh, lord, I actually used the word twee. I'm going to hell

Comments

[alice-the-raven.livejournal.com]

Awww, I liked Leandra, but it would be interesting to see her as a real bitch. :)

[tersa.livejournal.com]

The problem with it is the story ends up with a whole bunch of paragraphs starting with he/she/his/her. It's repetitive and annoying. So, I know I have some more work to do there to break it up a bit more.

Even in fic with propers, this is something I struggle against. I know it's probably me being more critical on myself than people are probably noticing, but when I have to go back and deliberately alter the sentence so as not to do that, I feel like it's glaringly obvious and therefore wooden.

"I've seen the way you and that elf look at each other."

That elf?

Hee. :) I can understand your ire, but at the same time...I kind of appreciate the fact that they did make an effort to pay lip service to the elvish racism. I think we, the 21st century players, tend to ignore it, but multi-racial relationships in Thedas would probably be looked at askance by anyone outside the immediate circle of friends.

A post on dragon_age put me in the mood to find a few DA:O fics I read when I first became interested in the fandom.

That post made me roll my eyes at the assumptions being made. I try to be nice to newbies, but...

Hubby will be home tomorrow (yay!) so, cleaning and stuff to be done. If this blog goes dark, that's why.

A good reason to go dark. :D Enjoy your time with him!

(*) oh, lord, I actually used the word twee. I'm going to hell

Sometimes, 'twee' is just the appropriate word for the given situation.